One of my goals is to try to keep up with Marc by continually challenging him to draw cool stuff. It seems like the more I do, the more he steps up in a big way. That middle panel is about 1000 times better than it would have been under my pen.
We’re at a point in this chapter where your knowledge of the characters really has to come into play. Otherwise, this dialogue is kind of boring. I think it’s a temptation for any writer to constantly spice things up by being clever. But, sometimes, you gotta take a step back and let the scene do its thing. Sometimes, you just gotta get out of the way of the story.